This is pretty great. I know it's an old story, but I'd love to see it get a sequel. It could be set much later while Chi-Chi, Videl and #18 are around (especially #18, no idea if she even eats or drinks but for the sake of the story let's just say she does xD).

Damn, you nailed everything. I might have liked to see a little more Blond Lunch, because she's my favorite, but you really did a good job of getting both her personalities in there. I also liked the ending; if I were in Roshi's place, I just know something bad would happen to me.

THAT, is how the scene should have gone IN THE FIRST PLACE!  Sorry but Toriyama, you always claim to be a big pervert full of "dirty" thoughts and what do we get after the best setup of all time?  A one panel pantie shot!

Anyway, I love your interpretation and I hope he would approve. I can never be totally objective with these reviews as I always prefer story with series/characters that I know and like but I guess that's true for everyone and we have enough people here to even it out. (*snaps* This is God! More Dragon Ball stories now! Get those girls back on that toilet!)  

Nice to see you brought Lunch (manga translation) into it so I suppose that counts as three girls going in this one.  Like Bulma, she has a truly wonderous and unique booty with very sexy wide hips. I've thought about her planting it on pot ever since I first saw the manga.  You really captured Blond Lunch's way of speaking in the dub.  I wonder how often the two of them find them selfs finishing each others dumps?  Dose one wipe better that the other? “Oh my! I robbed a bank and I have skid marks on my panties again!”

I like how you were able to do a voyeur story without making that the main focus of it.  Roshi's reactions were slipped seamlessly into the descriptions.

Had to laugh at the ending because I (and most people who would want to read this), had the exact same "Oh s@&t!" we know Roshi had.  It really dose help to fit this into the manga/anime context where perversion always has a price.  I would like to think that Toriyama originally had something very much like this in mind but knew he could never get it past his editor.

Author's Response:

That has to be it, I can bet Toriyama tried to do at least a panel with Bulma on the john and his editor probably swore to kill him with ninjutsu :P

Oh well, we've got a story to imagine such scenes now and hopefully someone might try and draw a picture to go with it.

 

Thanks for the review as always.

You right, but also some stories need more action before the good stuff happens.

Author's Response: Not really, as long as there is something to lead into the toilet scene rather than just having the girl going (unless of course it's meant to be a long story about her going) it can be pretty good. This certainly had enough action before the 'show' began.

Wow. You always do a great job describing the potty scene. Not just the act itself, but what the character is feeling and thinking. This one was no different, great job.

It's nice to see good 'ol Roshi get some peeping action in. To bad about the end, though. I suppose there might be a price to pay for peeping :).

I like the style of story, too. A "Fly On The Wall" type is something I've wanted to do, you did it excellently!

I liked the (possible) reference to Roshi's deal, too :).

As always, thanks for posting and keep up the gewd work!

Author's Response:

*Bowing over and over, very exaggereated*
Thank you, thank you... you give too little credit :P

I figured that this could easily tie into your little story, and hopefully you, me or someone might do a midquel if you will where we see what Roshi asked of her on Ox mountain. :D

 

Maybe you could do a fly on the wall with Teen Titans. Beast Boy could easily do a fly, and watch Raven, Starfire and Terra *Oh the naughtiness.....* 

I... need... a... microband!!!  Well, done, I've been wanting Roshi to get lucky one of these days.  Although, I'm not sure he'll consider himself "lucky" after what happens next.  Still he got to see both Launch and Bulma take great shits (now if only they were explosive diarrhea, he'd be so happy... oh wait, I'm thinking of me)!  Great story!  I especially liked the "sakura" reference to Bulma's butt hole.  I've actuallly seen flowers used as a "relief" picture in some manga (Love Hina comes to mind) after the girl finishes her business.  It had to be done is all I can say, and you did a fine job.  I look forward to your next fic.  Keep up the good work!

Author's Response:

Thanks, I knew alot of you guys would enjoy this.

Shame that they never had at least a panel in the Dragon Ball manga with Bulma on toilet, at least something being implied would have been enough. 

Wow, I always love story about someone peeping at girls on the potty! Wish I had one like that XD

Nice story as always Orpheum! What a lucky old b****rd!

Author's Response: You really ought to try and make your own stories sometimes too. It's not that hard really, all you have to do is just make a situation that leads to the girl going. It's really simple.