Title: Twas Christmas Eve (Rhyming)
Reviewer: yawn Signed
more poetic then me, nice!
Title: Twas Christmas Eve (Rhyming)
Reviewer: Toasty Signed
Yeah, some of the rhymes were really forced, and some of them had too many syllables or too few...so what? This story was still a blast to read and it took a lot of guts to write it in this Seussian style. Keep writing creative stuff like this!
Author's Response: Yeah, on second read through I cringe at some of the... pentameter is it? Well I can always edit it later, some of them are easily fixed by removing needless language in a sentence, I just need to find a time where I\'m not as sleepy as I was when I originally wrote it (I wanted it done for christmas day and all). But thank you toasty.
Title: Twas Christmas Eve (Rhyming)
Reviewer: Poowrite Signed
I will save this story and it shall replace The Night Before Christmas as the traditional Christmas story in my house.
Great job, very creative and fun to read. Here's to readin' more of your work,
Author's Response: Thank you, it is always awesome to receive compliments from good writers.
Title: Twas Christmas Eve (Rhyming)
Reviewer: OrpheumZero Signed
Pretty creative with the rhyming theme. While not the best, it served its purpose. Hard to say what was wrong in this, but I didn't much error.
Just remember what you don't do right and improve on those faults. Soon you'll be writing like a pro in no time.
Author's Response: Thank you Lord Orpheum. Improvement is my sole goal in writing. Well that and helping those with an otherwise \'rare\' fetish.
Title: Twas Christmas Eve (Rhyming)
Reviewer: Anime Lover Signed
Heheheh, that was great! ^_^ I loved that it rhymed and the way you distribed her loss.
Author's Response: Why thank you, the frame of the incident itself had already been in my head... the rhyming was a last second idea, which is why I apologized for it.