While it didn't capture the feel of a fairy tale quite as completely as Jimmy's giantess stories, it was still a fun read and you have probably joined Mr. Olsen on Mother Goose's hit list :)

I noticed the height thing too, though not in quite as much detail. Not a big deal, just something I noticed.

The POV switch was interesting, I can't imagine what that must have been like ^.^

In all, great work.

Author's Response:

*Twirls around in seat, looking out window* Holy shit I thought I saw a wolf go by.....

Thanks for the review. Yea, it doesn't have quite the punch as Jimmy's but I think it'll do fine. Can't wait to see what is entered into the contest. Heck, the only other idea I had was to make another Dragon Ball fic where Bulma uses the micro band to become giant, but I can't recall her doing that in the series and didn't want to conflict with the original story too much.

I cringed when I saw the cheesy title, but when I read the story I liked it. Giants' bodily functions are an attractive idea, and I think this story does the idea justice. Possibly its best feature is how it switches P.O.V just as Melody is about to let loose.

There were a few lines that I found especially clever. "With one hand stifling a giggle, and the other pressed firmly against her quaking rump, the girl stepped right next to the tower," "When asked why she was so happy by her fellow tribesmen, she simply grinned and made a squatting motion," and the part where you liken the sound of "her raging bowels" to "the snarl of a pack of wolves." That doesn't sound like a dainty little bowel movement is going to result. ^_~

There's a reality problem with the story, though. You describe the building as a tower that comes up to Melody's waist. But you say the Demis are a little under 2 feet tall, so a story on one of their buildings would have to be at least about 2'6" high, and you say the Uba are 16'6" tall, so Melody's waist would be about 8'6" off the ground, meaning the building she sits on couldn't have been much of a tower. Besides that, there are problems of grammar all throughout the story. You ought to proofread it before the contest is over. Also, the introductions seems kind of disjointed to me.

But for the most part this is a fun account of a monster dump. ^_^

Author's Response:

Haaaah! Correct use of science! Run!!!! *Disappears*

 

......:p just kidding. Yea I was kinda rushing the tower bit, but I wanted it to be just about the right height that she had to hop up onto it, and not be trying to climb up too high. But oh well, I can fix that later. Thanks for the review.

Are you gonna do a story for this contest? I would hope so. Now go read my new Digimon story, please! :D