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Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Poowrite Signed
Not bad, again I think the best part of the story is probably the dialog and the interactions between the characters. It was a little light on the sex, and it ended before things got to hot and heavy, but what was there was by no means bad.

There were a few times you slipped into past tense, but not many.

Overall, good story. The sex could have been a bit longer but I gotta say I was overall pretty happy with it.
Date: Aug 05, 2008 08:57 pm [Report This]
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