Wow. It took me his long to read this. This story is full of vivid action, comedy and, of course the content we come on to see in the first place ;). Creat stuff, shame there are so little DMC stories on here.

Author's Response: Glad you liked it. It was pretty easy catching the feel of the anime, especially Dante's love for pizza.

This starts with a great first sentence, and goes on to paint a very vivid scene. I could really picture the scene of the first sequence, although I didn't know where it was going (possibly because I've never played the game or watched the show). If the whole story were written as well as this sequence, it would be one of the best stories on the site.

The bathroom break was adequately described, but didn't do a lot for me, and the part after it just confused me (again, no doubt because I'm unfamiliar with the source material). One thing I noticed throughout the story is that many sentences seem to be missing words. You definitely need to proofread this.

Overall it's a good story, but I was disappointed by what followed the great opening sequence.

Author's Response:

I don't quite follow what you mean about the rest not following up. But I guess I might have missed detailing the town, though it's hard to describe as it's rarely seen in the show and games. Also, I have trouble keeping up with errors and making sure it comes out right as I go alone, normally realizing the errors after it's done.

Perhaps I'll do some editing tomorrow. Don't think that'd be against the rules.

Not bad, I was never really a fan of the Devil May Cry games, so I didn't know much about the characters (had to look Lady up :P) Still a fund story to read though.

There were a few mistakes here and there, probably could have been fixed with a bit of polish, but nothing that was to glaring.

In all, good work. Thanks for posting.

Author's Response:

That's too bad, but I guess the extreme action game aren't your forte. You should try out the anime, it's really good (Madhouse animated it, so that's plus :D).

One of these days I need to get a more recent writing program that'll fix the mistakes for me (absent mindedness; greatest enemy @_@)