Reviews For A Bad Time For a Phone Call
Good story.
Date: Jan 03, 2017 10:45 am [Report This]
Okay. Definetally not my taste. Nice descriptive words thoug, and a nice concept. How lucky is that, winning a radio contest in the middle of your dump. I can't tell if that's extreamly lucky or extreamly unluchy. Both? Good job.
Date: May 12, 2012 09:46 am [Report This]
is there gonna be any more storys involving this person id like to see
Date: Aug 07, 2010 04:35 am [Report This]
Good work, Great story it was just what i was looking for.
Date: Feb 24, 2009 01:09 am [Report This]
Good work, Great story it was just what i was looking for.
Date: Feb 24, 2009 01:09 am [Report This]
This is an amusing little story, but not fully satisfying. There's something I don't like about the beginning, but it's hard to put it into words. The first paragraph connects the contest to cooking utensils, connects those to a love of cooking, connects that to a love of food, connects that to binging, and mentions that she binged the night before. Then the first sentence of the second paragraph tells us she's going to have diarrhea due to her binge. I find it hard to really say what's wrong with this, it just doesn't seem like a natural way to begin and develop a story.
From there it proceeds pretty predictably, with a couple enjoyable bits. I particularly like the idea of the towel as a makeshift diaper, but it doesn't figure into the story for long. The ending could have used more punch.
But keep writing. You've got some talent, and I always enjoy seeing a challenge become a real story.
From there it proceeds pretty predictably, with a couple enjoyable bits. I particularly like the idea of the towel as a makeshift diaper, but it doesn't figure into the story for long. The ending could have used more punch.
But keep writing. You've got some talent, and I always enjoy seeing a challenge become a real story.
Date: Feb 03, 2009 03:19 am [Report This]