I would think so, you did pretty good.

Nice, I liked it, I also remember reading that fic of her messing her self in digiworld cause she couldn't get her pants her. that sure was some time ago.

Author's Response: Yea, the first story I wrote if I remember right. It's posted here, you know.

Good to see you back. If this short story dose nothing else, it's great if it get's you back into writing mode. It's nice to finally have a follow up to the first part.

As someone else here has noted, we have have toilet, accident and squatting stories but almost no squat toilet ones. Good to see one more. I'm not a big fan of enemas but I do like your descriptions of her "enjoying" the whole thing. It would be fun to see what affect a good dose of "Tai food" has on Mimi's tummy...

This story is pretty slight, but enjoyable. You use lots of great descriptive phrases, which keep it from becoming a typical pooping scene. I particularly liked "A low moan built behind pursed lips, while beads of sweat dotted her brow." I also liked how you compared the feeling in her colon to "someone trying to twist it into a balloon animal." One description that didn't work for me was "the moon glowing like an ephemeral sun." I don't see what that's supposed to mean, since "ephemeral" means "short-lived." I think you might have meant to use a different word, possibly "ethereal." I'm also confused by "...an invasive feeling not having a pencil poked up her butt."

Indeed, I enjoyed it. I caught a few grammer mistakes, one or two missing words "a feeling not having a pencil..." for example. Should probably be an "unlike" between "not" and "having."

Aside from that, pretty good. That's quite an impressive load she produced there. It was nice to see some enema use as well.

Anyway, good work.

Author's Response:

*Stares at the spelling mistake, you know the kind in animes where the person seems surprised and kinda perplexed*

 

Errr....

 

*Mistake explodes into a million pieces*

Oh well, I'll fix that some other time, though I should try and look into a better program with an automatic grammer checker, I just never seem to notice until it's too late. Glad you liked it, and hopefully as Yarr believed it might revitalize other authors to post new materials.