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Reviews For A Gamer\'s Dedication
This sounds like real-life experience, lol. Nevertheless - a practical, if original, solution! (:
Date: Mar 31, 2011 05:16 am [Report This]
please write a sequel!
Date: Nov 27, 2010 02:59 pm [Report This]
Not bad, that's dedication. It was a funny story and I can kinda relate to Konata. When I was heavy into FFXI, I got killed because I went to take a leak once. I never resorted to diapers, but I'm glad Konata did. Good story.
Date: Mar 28, 2009 04:02 pm [Report This]
This was one of the more awesome things on the internet, you did something I desired for so long. Even the chat and everything, it was great and felt really like a real "internet" conversation, and Konata is such a little dare devil ^^. A cute gamer girl in a diaper being all relaxed, awesome story, just a little bit to short and a little bit too less diaper content, but this really don't shortens the pure greatness of this piece of art
Author's Response: I'm glad you like it. If you want, I can add your name to one of Konata's Party members. I couldn't think of any names for the friends, so I just left them anonomous
Author's Response: I'm glad you like it. If you want, I can add your name to one of Konata's Party members. I couldn't think of any names for the friends, so I just left them anonomous
Date: Mar 16, 2009 07:01 am [Report This]
First off I'm thrilled that there is another entry in this contest. I'm also happy that it's the diapered gaming challenge, since it seemed promising to me, although I don't know much about "Lucky Star." I'm also happy that this is a story where peeing takes center stage. There are too few of these on Nyou Fiction. And I'm happy that you've written a story without yuri, self-stimulation etc. You're a talented writer, but most of your stories/chapters include stuff that grosses me out.
Since this is a contest entry, I'm giving it a more detailed review than I usually do. But it's also a story that warrants a detailed review, since there is a lot to talk about (despite it only being about 1,650 words). You picked a great way of opening the story, setting the scene inside the video game then "pulling out" to show us the desperate player. I don't know if the games depicted in this story are real, but it seems like they are. I was worried you would be vague about the actual gaming while focusing on Konata and the players she talks to, but instead you describe what's going on in the games in detail, and make it interesting.
I like Konata's wardrobe for the opening scene. Girls hardly ever wear boxers in fics, so it was nice to see Konata in a pair. Not that they're sexy, it's just a nice change of pace from Hello Kitty panties and the other stuff writers clothes their heroines in. Plus it seems to go along with Konata's personality, although like I said I have only basic knowledge of "Lucky Star." Which reminds me, I think a physical description of Konata is in order. It would allow non-fans to picture her, and even the readers who know what she looks like would be brought into the story better if you provide a vivid description.
But despite the "missing pieces" you describe her and her desperation very well. "...She was sitting on her rear but she was in constant motion, scissoring her thighs together in a desperate struggle to remain in control of her bladder and focus on attacking the Rathalos in front of her." That's gold! Saying her bladder is getting "increasingly impatient with her" is also clever.
Showing her having an accident in her underwear that convinces her to wear diapers, then showing her wet said diapers was a good formula for the story. And, besides not having a strong sense of conclusion at the end, it was executed well. The description of the actual wetting is good, and I love the description of wearing the diaper. "Turning around, Konata drops to her knees to load Monster Hunter G into her PS2 and sat back on her diapered rear, feeling and hearing it crinkle under her, as she reaches for the controller." The crinkling is the sort of detail that gets overlooked in diaper stories.
Author's Response:
Since this is a contest entry, I'm giving it a more detailed review than I usually do. But it's also a story that warrants a detailed review, since there is a lot to talk about (despite it only being about 1,650 words). You picked a great way of opening the story, setting the scene inside the video game then "pulling out" to show us the desperate player. I don't know if the games depicted in this story are real, but it seems like they are. I was worried you would be vague about the actual gaming while focusing on Konata and the players she talks to, but instead you describe what's going on in the games in detail, and make it interesting.
I like Konata's wardrobe for the opening scene. Girls hardly ever wear boxers in fics, so it was nice to see Konata in a pair. Not that they're sexy, it's just a nice change of pace from Hello Kitty panties and the other stuff writers clothes their heroines in. Plus it seems to go along with Konata's personality, although like I said I have only basic knowledge of "Lucky Star." Which reminds me, I think a physical description of Konata is in order. It would allow non-fans to picture her, and even the readers who know what she looks like would be brought into the story better if you provide a vivid description.
But despite the "missing pieces" you describe her and her desperation very well. "...She was sitting on her rear but she was in constant motion, scissoring her thighs together in a desperate struggle to remain in control of her bladder and focus on attacking the Rathalos in front of her." That's gold! Saying her bladder is getting "increasingly impatient with her" is also clever.
Showing her having an accident in her underwear that convinces her to wear diapers, then showing her wet said diapers was a good formula for the story. And, besides not having a strong sense of conclusion at the end, it was executed well. The description of the actual wetting is good, and I love the description of wearing the diaper. "Turning around, Konata drops to her knees to load Monster Hunter G into her PS2 and sat back on her diapered rear, feeling and hearing it crinkle under her, as she reaches for the controller." The crinkling is the sort of detail that gets overlooked in diaper stories.
Author's Response:
I knew you didn't like the yuri and sex, but, it grosses you out? O_o
The opening just seemed to be the right way to open the fic, especially with fica about a gamer like Konata. And yes, the gme is very much real, and VERY fun ^_^ it's like a skill-based Phantasy Star Universe.
Ahh, the waredrobe ^_^ I find it cute when girl's wear boxer shorts or even briefs... Charle's Angels ^_^ hehehehe *drools* Ahem, anyway, In the Anime Konata is shown wearing boy's underwear, so it only seemed right to include that particular wardrobe in the fic ^_^
Anyway, glad you like the fic ^_^
Date: Mar 16, 2009 12:27 am [Report This]
Nice story! Glad to see someone else finally got into the contest. Heheheh, maybe now we can finally end it and get onto a new one XP
Author's Response: glad you like it ^_^
Author's Response: glad you like it ^_^
Date: Mar 15, 2009 11:31 pm [Report This]