I thought it was pretty good. Sounds like the main characters are super-heroes of some sort? Like Jimmy, I'd have liked to see a little more background on them. Perhaps future stories can feature the same characters?

As a formatting tip, try to put a blank line between every paragraph break, including dialog paragraph breaks. Having them scrunched together made it kinda hard to follow. Maybe it's just my browser.

Overall, really good. I liked the idea of Blake sitting on Aurore's lap for the buddy dump, but considering Blake's power, wouldn't that be a little dangerous?

Anyway, good work. Here's hoping we see more :D

Author's Response: Well...I'm going to post some other stories about them, including background, in a bit, but they don't involve any scat or the like. Oh, and they aren't superheroes. You'll find out what they are IF I put these stories up. It's stuff I want to have published, so I'll want to make sure no professional publishers find it here. Although it may hurt my chances if they found it anywhere.

Nice buddy dumping story! Nice to have you back! It's a great story, but the conversation are hard to read. What are those things anyway?

Author's Response: A vampiress and a woman whose bodily fluids and such all have a PH of zero (she's the only woman who can deal with it). It'll become clear once I finish the novel I'm writing. Thanks, btw.

I like how you've created your own world. There isn't a lot of that in this kind of fic. However I wish the reader got more background on these characters and the rest of the premise. Obviously, the bathroom action is meant to take center stage, but that doesn't mean there can't be more background info inserted into the story.

You're creative when it comes to descriptions and the wording of sentences, although toward the end things seem to melt into more generic prose. One line I have to compliment you on is, "Come on, cheeks, stay together." Imagining a girl saying that (especially the girl you describe) is just yummy. ^_^

Basically this is a very entertaining story, it just needed more development.

Author's Response: The background part I understand. You may have to wait a little while for that, though. It all depends on if I can find a publisher. If I can't, the story I created them for will be back up on dART when it's finished. Also, I'm a bit rusty when it comes to writing this kind of thing. I'm slightly more used to writing more sci-fi/action based stuff. But hey, makes a change. Glad you enjoyed it, though.