Nice to see a new Orpheum story. I agree that it could use a little more expansion/editing as it my be somewhat ruff and rushed, but overall very enjoyable.

It may not fit in absolutely perfectly with the real story (the girls don't hate each other as much after their fight at the exam) but I'm sure the artist who did those pics. had a scenario much like this in mind. You really captured the way they look like their suffering in those shots. Hinata's scene was an interesting addition but I worry that she might have had a heart attack if she actually made a sloppy mess in her pants in full view of Naruto!

Ya, the two hundred episodes of filler thing sucks, even I lost interest after a wile. I've been reading the manga after the time skip though and it's very good. When they inevitably put it on CN, you should still give it a try... and the girls are even cuter.

Sorry Zee_phyro, but from what I can tell, Kishimoto is not one of those artists who are into our kind of thing. But the good news is that I've noticed some other famous manga artists who seem to be.

I agree this could use some more development, but it's quite entertaining as it is. You describe each girl's dump well, and they're well differentiated. The Hinata part caught me by surprise. I thought the story was winding down, and then the cutest girl in the Naruto universe started showing signs of a bowel emergency...I was happy, to say the least. ^_^ You describe Hinata's accident well, and my favorite part is where you liken the sound to a squishing wet rubber boot.

Now for the criticisms. "Diarrhetic" isn't a word. The word you're looking for is "laxative." There are various other places where you use the wrong words or leave words out. But despite the problems it's a very enjoyable story. Keep up the good work!

Author's Response:

Actually it is, usually it's to describe something that can cause diarrhea (like coffee, prunes, etc.) But yes, it does need some fine-tuning. One of these when I'm not nearing dead tired I'll probably spruce it up and fix the missing words and such.

Well I enjoyed them. No doubt you drew inspiration from the pictures of Sakura and Ino suffering diarrhea? Hinata was a nice touch, kinda hard not to feel a little bad for her though :).

Anyway, good work. I enjoyed it. As always.

Author's Response: Yep, you have to agree those pics were just begging 'turn into story fodder!'. I figured Hinata could use a little love so I added her to the mix. Though I'll probably try to add more humor once I decide to back and fine tune it. I still hope to see your extended version of "Bodyswap in the hidden leaf village" soon, very soon *Uses Mind-Taking powers* Ooo-eeee-ooooo!