Little late since this was posted a while ago, but fantastic!

Nice story, and I have to go against my fellow reviewers here; I liked the fact that most of the action besides the uncontainable huge farts were hidden behind walls; it made the "revelation scene" have more ooph to it when the massive load she produced was revealed.

Hopefully you will contribute more soon.

Great work, your stories are some of my favorites and this is no exception.

I'm unfamiliar with Persona 4, but this is a common gripe with stories posted here and really doesn't do much to take away from the story.

I especially liked Chapter one. The intentional laxative use appealed to me.

Overall, very good.

When I was reading this, I felt kind of lost, since I have no knowledge of "Persona 4." However, once the story of Rise's problem emerged, the background ceased to matter.

I love the plot of the constipated chick being too shy to buy laxatives herself. I've wanted to write a story like that for a long time, and I even made a challenge, but nothing's come of it. So that's part of the reason I appreciated this fic. Another strength is that the embarrassment and anxiety of the girls is conveyed well. Even though they're friends and open up to each other, they still feel uneasy about this taboo subject. That's realistic, and it's a nice change from the stories where girls are totally and shamelessly open (not that those aren't entertaining in their own way).

Yukiko and Rise both get some nice personal descriptions like "beads of sweat forming behind her short bangs," "grabbing the hem of her pleated skirt," and "a nervous giggle that caused her auburn pigtails to bounce up and down." However, I would have liked more full descriptions of their features, preferably toward the beginning.

Another "big" thing this story has going for it is the surprise Yukiko (and the reader) gets when she sees Rise squatting over her productions.

Here are a couple of my favorite lines. "When you got out of the TV world, did you have any...um...complications?" When a girl in a Nyou fic says something like that, you know what she means. ; ) And, "This was news to Yukiko, and she was not sure exactly what Rise had in mind."

The last sentence of Chapter 2 didn't make much sense to me. I'm guessing it's something I'd get if I'd played the game.

Good to see you back in action, Micro! I hope that this story heralds a long and fruitful series of others like it.

As for the story, I also liked the characterization, seeing as how I know about the Persona series but have never played it, it was nice to get some background on the characters.

I respect your choice to put the majority of Rise's ordeal through Yukiko's point of view, and I think I understand why. I once downloaded a group of soundfiles from some forum somewhere that were just the sounds of a woman pooping, and it was really awesome to listen to. I think that's because sometimes it's fun to just hint at what's going on and leave the details to the imagination. I wouldn't mind if you did it again, but hopefully you'll continue to include more explicit scenes as well!

Wow, this is a really great story!! Great job on the farting parts especially.

I had decided not to try to review stories from games/shows I've never even heard of, but I do want to say a few things about this.

First, it's great to see another new Micro story and if you really started doing a few drawings again like you mentioned on the forum it would be... (Homer Simpson drooling face) Ahhhhgggh...

The story ya... You did a good job of establishing the back story and characters for people who don't know them. I was able to able to understand everything in the story just from the details you added.

Like that you had Yukiko try the laxatives on herself at the end of the first part, you made it seem pretty believable. Two gassy, messy girl dumps for the price of one! There are some funny and unexpected parts like how Rise just assumes Yukiko is going to stay and help her. All your descriptions of the farts and smells where especially vivid, more than in most stories for some reason. This dose seem like Yarr's kind of thing, it'll be hard to beat.

As for having some of the "action" happen behind closed doors, I understand why you did it. In this case it works, plus we get to see (and smell) the result through Yukiko, just don't do it too often!