Great job, besides the miner stuff like a lack in detail and length (indidually not over all) its was a fun read :). I really like this unique style of several different girls sharing one toilet over time. And if you're looking for a little food for thought when it comes to your next chapter, one idea could be a forien ninja like Temari and/or Samui maybe not reacting well to hidden leaf food and maybe even be forced to share a public restroom with a local like Tsunade or Anko.

But anyway good job and its good to see more writers here, when my life calms down a little I'll try and join ya :)

It's a good first effort, but still has lots of room for improvement. One, you should elaborate on why there's a three year jump, unless you're referencing Naruto's departure, also things like the village expanding don't really seem necessary unless they have more direct impact on things like the bathroom itself.

Another thing to remember, space your paragraphs. A general rule of thumb is to space after every 4-5 periods. This helps ensure the reader doesn't strain themself to try and keep track of where they're reading, not to mention the fact that large blocks of text just seem rather unappealing.

In rereference to the dumps, they seemed nicely done, but could be a bit longer, more involved, and maybe even have some "sound" from the girls (straining/grunting/etc). But most importantly is make everything 'flow' in a natural way and not just seem like random descriptions.

Overall, it's nicely done certainly feels like effort was put into it. I just think that you can do better of course, so don't be too offended by the comment. :)

GREAT STORY POINT BLANK!!!!

 It's about time someone posted another Naruto story, and here it is!

 You did great for a first-timer, I'd love to see more work from you.....perhaps a Kingdom Hearts story next? 

For your first story? Excellently well written.

Though my only real disappointment was that Ino was able to resist her urge to vomit... but thats just me, I love vomit stories.