I enjoy this story quite a bit, but I feel like it needs a lot of revisions. Mainly it should be expanded to include more details, so we're shown more and told less. There are also a few common writing problems like run-on sentences and tense-shifts. It would help to know more backstory. There isn't much of an introduction to these characters or their magical world, and I felt like I was reading a fanfic of a show I'd never seen. That being said, I've always thought wizard-battles were fun, and the thought of a female mage getting her digestion magically sped up until she messes herself is a very fun one. Little touches like the self-repairing vase contribute to the story's entertainment value.

Author's Response: Ah, sounds like a good idea, let me see how i can get that to work. Thanks