The low scores this received are unfair. It's certainly a lot better-written than a lot of the recent stories, and you implied enough of the defecation while keeping it tame and not writing hardcore scat, so you stuck to your own principles. It was fun, it had some nice realistic dialogue, a really vivid setting, and I found myself really invested in the characters in a strange way - the way they played off of each other and Sam's reactions to her "gal pal" were charming and amusing.
A short, sweet story with some great toilet action and excellent atmosphere. I hope to see more from you in the future.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Author's Response:
Because she's on the toilet.
I figured the onomatopoeias I used made it pretty obvious, but I guess not.
Author's Response:
Yeah, I'm not sure what the deal is with the formatting; it seems to do that whenever I copy/paste from st.ash.
As far as why she's in the toilet, ..well, she's taking a dump. I don't go into detail because I don't write explicit scat. Considering the story is only tagged with "farting" and not "defecation", "scat" etc, so I'm not sure what you were expecting going in.