Amazing story. As a Metroid fan, I can say you did very well in this. Is an alternate ending where she makes it to the toilet something you would consider?
Author's Response: Thanks. I was honestly worried someone was going to call me for butchering Samus' character ^^. As for an alternate ending where she makes it to the toilet... well... I hadn't really thought about it. I suppose it would be a good thing to come to if I ever want to shake some writer's block since it'd just be one scene.
Reviews For Samus' Escape
Date: Jun 16, 2014 03:57 pm [Report This]
I love your description of Samus' increasingly futile efforts to avoid soiling herself. The description of the accident she finally has to allow is also vivid, and I like her line about the shower. You let her have an accident while still seeming strong, because she resists the accident for so long and through such tough circumstances.
You don't focus too much on her bowels, either. You also paint a great picture of peril. It's nice how the doomed planet parallels Samus' problem, and also reminds her of it. I didn't like the suit talking to her. It seemed unnecessary. It also reminds me too much of an old Metroid fic I didn't really like. Other than that, I have no complaints. You've sullied Samus with great skill!
Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I'm relieved to hear that I sullied her with great skill ^^. It was a fun story to write, and I'm thrilled that it is being received as well as it is :).
You don't focus too much on her bowels, either. You also paint a great picture of peril. It's nice how the doomed planet parallels Samus' problem, and also reminds her of it. I didn't like the suit talking to her. It seemed unnecessary. It also reminds me too much of an old Metroid fic I didn't really like. Other than that, I have no complaints. You've sullied Samus with great skill!
Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I'm relieved to hear that I sullied her with great skill ^^. It was a fun story to write, and I'm thrilled that it is being received as well as it is :).
Date: Jun 02, 2014 01:05 am [Report This]
Another Poowrite story, yay! Anyhoof, this was quite well done my friend,kudos
Author's Response: Thanks, glad you enjoyed it!
Author's Response: Thanks, glad you enjoyed it!
Date: May 31, 2014 06:15 pm [Report This]
It was pretty great as per usual with your stories. My favorite part was her suit telling her about reduced combat efficiency if she soiled herself and telling her to find a bathroom. That was most enjoyably embarrassing.
Author's Response: Thanks! For some reason, I've always wanted to do something like that. Where a machine warns its user that she needs to get to a bathroom quickly. For some reason, it's just always something that tickled my fancy.
Author's Response: Thanks! For some reason, I've always wanted to do something like that. Where a machine warns its user that she needs to get to a bathroom quickly. For some reason, it's just always something that tickled my fancy.
Date: May 30, 2014 07:54 pm [Report This]
Very nice. This kind of reminds me of that one story with the audio/visual logs, just showing the events from Samus' view. It's a little short, but to the point and feels as true as possible to the Metroid games. Not sure about the suit talking to her, but it's a neat way to let her vent to something instead of just talking to herself all the while.
Hope you'll consider some of the ideas I had mentioned in the emails. Or even just whip something with Yuna again. ;)
Author's Response: Thanks! The AV log story definitely helped inspire this one. I wondered how people would react to the suit “talking” to her, but I couldn't figure out a good way for it to communicate information to her in a non-distracting way. I felt like HUD displays would draw her attention, which could be dangerous in combat situations. The impression that I got from reading up on the Power Suit's wiki was that there was a strong mental component to it, and thought that if it communicated information through thoughts or feelings it might be less distracting. Anyway, like I said... I had to make some stuff up since I don't know much about the series :). Thanks again for reading. I really would like to post around here more often... I miss writing stories, but even still it can be hard to come up with the time and motivation to do one.
Date: May 29, 2014 10:46 pm [Report This]
Well I cannot be the person to judge your adherence to cannon as I am hardly familiar with the Metroid verse myself. I don't pretend to be versed enough in the english language to critique the writing either. But I did like reading this story. The atmosphere quickly built in intensity and her impending accident only heightened that. The accident itself was brilliantly done, detailed to an extent I find myself envious of.
All in all, five for five.
Till next we speak
-Echo
Author's Response: Thank you for your kind words, and for taking the time to review this! I'm glad you enjoyed it. I don't think I've ever tried an escape sequence like this, I felt like it turned out pretty decent. It'd heartening to see that you agree :).
I don't think you have anything to be envious of. Your accident scenes are simply amazing!
Date: May 29, 2014 08:14 pm [Report This]