I truly am mind blown. This story is on a whole new level compared to your other ones. Mostly correct English and grammar deserves an applause becase your other stories lack that.
Author's Response: Thanks for the review!I did put a lot more time into this one!
Reviews For Attack on Titan stories
Date: Oct 02, 2016 07:56 am [Report This]
Pretty entertaining, though I would think Annie's mindset would be more methodical and cold, given her tough demeanor. Beyond that, I would say maybe some more scene could happen between her search for a bathroom and trying to claim rights to the pot in the restaurant, perhaps with someone trying to pull a "Paying customers, only" and Annie harshly saying if she messes her pants and titans attack, she'll be at a disadvantage and unable to save the people properly.
Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I guess I could have thought of a scene like that but I tried to focus on the action a bit more.
Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I guess I could have thought of a scene like that but I tried to focus on the action a bit more.
Date: Sep 26, 2016 04:00 pm [Report This]
There is some major improvements in this one compared to your previous ones. Congrats! If you need some more pointers, I would recommend to try and reduce the number of line breaks. Its not a crime to have more than 2 sentences per paragraph. Also try to mix up your sentence order. Most of them start with She or The.
Author's Response: I will try to mix up the sentences since I can agree it gets pretty repetitive.Thanks for the review.
Author's Response: I will try to mix up the sentences since I can agree it gets pretty repetitive.Thanks for the review.
Date: Sep 25, 2016 10:01 am [Report This]
Again, weird-ass grammar and very short. You need an intoduction that builds up excitement and a better ending.
Author's Response: Thanks for the review and the advice.I will try to improve my stories from now on.
Author's Response: Thanks for the review and the advice.I will try to improve my stories from now on.
Date: Sep 05, 2016 02:51 pm [Report This]
Impressive! You keep improving, so keep up the good work!
Author's Response: Thanks a lot!Glad you enjoyed it!
Author's Response: Thanks a lot!Glad you enjoyed it!
Date: Sep 01, 2016 06:14 pm [Report This]
Attack on titanfall is coming out.
Date: Aug 31, 2016 04:15 pm [Report This]
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