Author's Response: Still, it's nice to hear what others have to say about the fixes.
This reads like a sweet, funny story that happens to have pooping in it as opposed to the toilet focus you normally see from short stories here.
I completely believe the characters doing this. Nami's mom would certainly have had that kind of practical attitude and passed it on to her children.
As a lot of the action centered around young girls and their mom, I didn't find it as sexy as some of your work, but very enjoyable as a story.
Author's Response:
Not even the bits with Belle-Mere at least? :P
Anyway, thanks for the review, glad you enjoyed it and felt it was fitting to the story. I do admit it's rather short, but kind of fits that way with the original scene in a way instead of dragging out for the sake of a silly "needs to have this many words/pages" habit. If you haven't, don't forget to check out the other stories as you get further into the series and familiar with the girls.
Well, finally went to check this out.
Loved the writing style and how you got everyone on character with this in sorts. :)
Still, it was quite interesting of how Robin solved that problem of hers.
Keep up the good work!
Author's Response: Thanks. Glad you enjoyed it.
Author's Response: Well there was that sort of contest in my WITCH story, but that's the only immediate one that comes to mind. If you ever have a chance, try watching episode 64 of One Piece, and you'll see how the whole thing ties in.
Author's Response:
I'm certainly thinking about it, if you look at my official thread here in the forums ("Things I do..."), you can see a lovely picture of Robin getting awfully close to clogging the toilet. This has given me an idea for somethign to write, or course probably not the multi-part epic I've been trying to come up with.
Anyway, thanks for the review. It's always appreciated.
Author's Response:
Well of course. It's a girl, on a ship full of dudes. One toilet + girl = Comedy gold! :P
I've even thought of doing a more, involved sequel story eventually, but I'll probably have to wait until I can figure out a good story.
There were a few grammer errors, blah blah. Nothing that detracted from the story. Great work :)
Author's Response:
Gah! Damned spelling errors! Die!!!
*Sane, again*
Thanks for the review, also go and watch One Piece sometime. The first season is on DVD, the dub is by Funimation and they know their stuff.....also Nami has big tits, it's win win :P
Author's Response:
Bit stretched? How so? If you mean over the top, it's not quite that impossible, you'd be amazed how much a person can produce depending on the time they've held it in, how much they ate and all that.
As for personality, they're meant to be a bunch of zany characters. They're not your average pirates.
Author's Response:
Precisely, somebody sees her naked *or a gay guy who can change into other people imitates her*, she'll beat the hell out of them. Luffy needs a punch in the head, she'll clobber him to next sunday!
Some poeple I'm sure will notice the call back references to my "Indecent Proposal" series on the image site before it died.
One wonders tho, who had to clean up the stuffed toilet?
Author's Response:
Let's just say that whoever gets that 'honor' is not gonna enjoy it one bit. As for Nami, well, she'll probably charge the guys for catching her on the pot citing 'no free show'. XP
I particulary enjoyed writing Ussop's talltale, it just seemed so much like his own.