The stories very nice... I like how there aren't many grammar mistake in your story. If I remember correctly, I spotted only one. One problem I notice is that there is a lack of warnings that represent the story. For example, you should definitely add "farting". I was thinking "pantypoop" as another warning, but then your story doesn't focus on that. Point is, good story, no doubt, but put some warnings next time.

Author's Response:

Ah, thank you! I try to make sure there aren't any grammar issues in my work; I'll have to go through and re-check. Thanks for the heads up!

 

I could've sworn I added those warnings, but I guess not. I'll add them now~