Though not excellent, you have some good ideas which you execute reasonably well. I like the idea of Tifa trying to pee quickly and being unable since she's putting so much pressure on her body to perform. Shy bladder is a subject rarely touched upon in pee fics. I also like the idea of fighting until she wets herself. I really loved the ending, and the line "Time wasn't the cause..." Good fic.

I though it was outstanding. It was a very good read, you managed to balance action and desperation perfectly. Not too much or too little of either.

The wetting itself left something to be desired, but it still worked and I honestly wonder if a more descriptive wetting scene would have been out of place.

The fighting felt authentic as well. Reminded me of something straight from Advent Children.

In all, outstanding work. Thanks for sharing.

Author's Response:

Thanks, I'm glad you liked it, I do feel like the ws was more of a secondary focus though

I was thinking more Dead Fantasy when i was doing the fighting, especially the falling down the building part ^_^