Title: -Said the Potty to the Spy Reviewer: Jimmy Olsen Signed
This is truly excellent in plotting, characterization, and descriptions. My one complaint is that I didn't know how to picture her. You don't really say if the illusion just tricks people's perceptions of her, or if it's like one of those holographic disguises, or if she was physically changed in size and shape so long as she wore the magical suit.

Author's Response: I was imagining it using the rules for D&D illusions (as I understand them), with a few extra benefits because it's "very powerful magic": someone who looks at her sees the illusion, and someone who touches her feels what the illusion should feel like even though they're really touching something else. But she's immune to it, so when she looks down she sees her real body. Also, anyone who's magically immune (to illusions in general or that one in particular, such as the people helping her get in and out of it) will see both illusion and the real image beneath, and know which one is real (because the illusion looks ghostly and can't be touched). When I imagined her, I always imagined her as she sees herself, mostly because she's alone for almost the whole story. Hope that clears it up a bit.
Date: Jul 01, 2012 10:15 pm [Report This]
Title: -Said the Potty to the Spy Reviewer: MMTwo Signed
Very interesting, though I was confused through the start on how she actually looked, compared to her disguise.

A fun mess.
Date: May 01, 2012 02:16 pm [Report This]
Title: -Said the Potty to the Spy Reviewer: HaloAnime Signed
Very funny and cute! please continue this story!
Date: Jan 08, 2012 08:50 pm [Report This]
Title: -Said the Potty to the Spy Reviewer: Toasty Signed
WOW! What a great story! I think this may be the best you've written yet. The writing flowed really well, and the story of court intrigue was very good, just as it was in "The Moon's Flood." The magical spy gadgets used by the intelligence agency were creative and fun to read about. And of course, your descriptions were extremely vivid...two peaches perched on a wineglass filled with chocolate mousse and drizzled with golden honey? Now THERE'S an image I don't think I'll ever be able to get out of my head. Nor would I want to! :D

Author's Response: The 'peaches' line was one I thought of right away (originally it was bowling balls on something else, but that's too much exaggeration; also, peaches are nice and soft), and when I finally got around to the end of the story I got a little carried away with it.
Date: Jan 08, 2012 01:24 pm [Report This]
Title: -Said the Potty to the Spy Reviewer: killyoself Signed
Very detailed and creative! I hope you write one with more farting in it and possibly farts while having sex! This was really good!

Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it. I already have an vague idea for a continuation, but it might take a while to get it more fleshed out. I'm really not that into farting by itself.
Date: Jan 08, 2012 10:21 am [Report This]
Title: -Said the Potty to the Spy Reviewer: OrpheumZero Signed
Very good. An interesting story, as we only have a handful of spy related stories. While it seemed like the girl Anya was standing in for could have been older, at least to make up for some of the size and also any possible "uncharacteristic" moments, it seemed to all piece together nicely.

Author's Response: I had intended to handwave the height and other size issues as "the illusion is super sophisticated and can make people believe they're touching someone's forehead instead of their belly" or whatever, but it never came up. Addressing something like that in exposition is usually more cumbersome than ignoring it. In hindsight, the exact age just as irrelevant, so I could have as easily not mentioned it at all.
Date: Jan 07, 2012 04:21 pm [Report This]

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