This is an interesting story. I like reading about desperation and women peeing standing up (or trying and failing). The hallucination is a clever and surprising addition to the story, and keeps it from seeming generic. If I had to suggest anything, it would be going into more detail. In this story, things happen suddenly and then they're over. There's not much description or build-up or anything. I think that's something to work on. Mainly this is an entertaining little story.

Author's Response: Thanks, Jimmy! Truth be told, this was like, the first Fic I ever wrote and posted on the main site. (which is probably why there wasn't much build-up) But, I'm glad you like it. Now if only my other Fic, The Promoting fest would get some reviews.